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Bluesy Socrateaser

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Joined: Thu Feb 26, 2009 6:14 am

From this:

conditions come after the rain
serioius helpers
create chaos
the ruler instead of the darkening clouds
brings order
however 9 at the beginning creates hesitations
hindrances
and useless helpers
nonetheless the difficulties pile up and up
and up
then ten years pass
6 months
3 weeks
44 days
106 hours
4 minutes
and the ridget line in the 6th place
fines
uncertainty with the toxic paint
in room 54

To this:

conditions come after the rain
serious helpers creating chaos
rulers instead of the darkening clouds
brings order
however 9 at the beginning
creates hesitations, hindrances
and useless helpers
nonetheless the difficulties pile up
ten years pass
6 months
3 weeks
44 days
106 hours
4 minutes
and the rigid line
in the 6th place finds uncertainty
with the toxic paint in room 54

With Respects,

As little as possible was done in order that a bit of the abstract flavor that was originally intended would remain.

...

...Just being Bluesy

Posted: Wed Mar 11, 2009 6:27 am

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