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Bluesy Socrateaser

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Joined: Thu Feb 26, 2009 6:14 am

From this:

the idling offspring
remains an open passager
erased ten thousand lotus seeds
holding less for fear

To this:

the idling offspring
remains an open passenger
removing ten thousand lotus seeds
yet holding on to far fewer
for fear he too will become one

With Respects,

As little as possible was done in order that a bit of the abstract flavor that was originally intended would remain.

...

...Just being Bluesy

Posted: Wed Mar 11, 2009 5:55 am

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