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Posted by Ben Grader on Thu Jan 20, 2005 6:14 pm
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Is there afterlife
<br>shall I pass to higher things
<br>will all cease to be.
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<br>Someday I will know
<br>but knowing will be no good.
<br>Then I will not care.
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Posted by Lerins on Thu Jul 14, 2005 7:41 pm
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It's short and to the point, which for poetry, isn't always good, but this does it well. The only criticism I have would be to add question marks to the lines in the first stanza. I had to read through it two or three times to figure out that each line was a seperate thought.
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Posted by Phil on Fri Jul 15, 2005 7:09 pm
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Well, it <i>is</i> a double haiku, which means it supposed to be short; being to the point is optional, but generally works well for the form.
<br>I really like this, as it's sort of related to some things I've spent time trying to figure out (mostly, the value of life and things of that nature). I agree about the question marks, but it's a rather minor thing.
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Posted by Ben Grader on Fri Sep 02, 2005 10:55 am
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Thanks for the comments, Yes I agree I should have put in ?s but I wanted the first stanza to be read as one long question. The reason I left it was to keep the standard Haiku form.
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Posted by Bluesy Socrateaser on Mon Mar 02, 2009 9:39 am
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<blockquote ><div><cite>Quote</cite>Someday I will know
<br />but knowing will be no good.
<br />Then I will not care.</div></blockquote>
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<br />Thinking singularly, you may be right.
<br />Consciousness itself however may have other plans, and it won't need a tired old body or a fresh, youthful expiree to help it decide.
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<br />Ever the optimist here.
<br />Ever the romantic over there.
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