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Posted by Ben Grader on Thu Oct 28, 2004 10:18 pm
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Once the apple of its owners eye
<br>it sits there quietly, rusting away.
<br>The spotted chrome, no longer gleams
<br>the rear view mirrors robbed
<br>to fit another car in need.
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<br>Headlights have gone so too
<br>has the small steering wheel
<br>which was the owners pride.
<br>The souped-up engine has lost
<br>the head, and special carb.
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<br>When they were first fitted on
<br>at great expense, he?d paid
<br>the cost off over many a month;
<br>?twas almost like a Cooper S
<br>in speed and rorty noise.
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<br>Then came the night of pain
<br>the mental anguish, joy riders
<br>stole the precious car and wrecked it
<br>on a careless night of thievish ?fun?
<br>turning it upside down when cornering fast.
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<br>?Its written off? the insurance agent said.
<br>?The roof is dented in, the body shell
<br>no longer safe?. Now it sits and gently
<br>decomposes; as they buy the precious parts
<br>from the corner of a breakers yard.
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<br>So what was once, its owners pride and joy;
<br>has met the fate that all things do.
<br>No longer washed down on a Sunday morn
<br>or lovingly polished up, with ?Turtle Wax?.
<br>It has now become a heap of dying junk.
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Posted by Phil on Tue Nov 02, 2004 10:25 pm
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I really like this ... it's hard to explain exactly why, but I like that it really conveys a feeling to go along with each part of it. The temporal change in the middle (and then the change back) adds a lot, and doesn't throw anything off, as is usually pretty easy to do.
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Posted by Lerins on Thu Jul 14, 2005 7:03 pm
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I agree with Phil, this poem is really good at inspiring mental imagery to go along with each verse.
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Posted by Bluesy Socrateaser on Wed Mar 11, 2009 6:38 am
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Yes.
<br />A bit like marriage.
<br />Just follow along and consider the 'stealing' to be the future spouse.
<br />The rest falls in line quite well.
<br />I trust all will find something relative in the bowels of the poem.
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<br />...<img src="http://www.poetsquill.com/images/forums/emoticons/cool.gif" alt='8)' />
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