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Posted by SeshendraSharma on Mon Mar 01, 2004 4:04 pm
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Even by bloodshed, which is indefinably superior to gold<br>Dreams did not become realities-<br>Only fools do not know that<br>evolution also is subject to evolution-<br><br>** * * *
* * * * <br>When the earth is ploughed with a plough<br>Only then it becomes a country<br>When the earth is ploughed with a quill<br>Then it becomes an epic<br>If it is not ploughed either with a plough or quill<br>It is merely just merely
earth-<br><br>* * * * * * * * * * <br>24 hours of distance lies from sun to sun<br>only two hearts of distance lies <br>from human being to human being-<br>The sky opening up its pink folds<br>flying itself in the winds of dawn-<br>Look! How many riffles of distance lies<br>From village to war-<br><br><br>Seshendra Sharma<br>www.geocities.com/saatyaki2001<br>gsaatyaki@hotmail.com
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Posted by rainrose on Thu Oct 28, 2004 4:14 am
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Oo, intriguing ending. I like the use of the dash to punctuate it. The last stanza particularly interested me. I don't quite know what to say. I can't believe no one has responded to this yet.
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Posted by Ben Grader on Thu Oct 28, 2004 10:02 pm
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I cannot understand what is happening on PQ, There has been 96 viewings of this work since March 1st 2004.
<br>No-one has made a comment until Rainrose on 28th October.
<br>It is time to wake up and look at others work AND COMMENT on it.
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<br>I particularly liked the simile: -
<br><i> <!--QuoteBegin--></span><table border="0" align="center" width="95%" cellpadding="3" cellspacing="1" bgcolor="#DDDDDD" class="wrap"><tr class="wrap"><td bgcolor="#999999" class="wrap"><b>Quote</b> </td></tr><tr><td class="QUOTE"><!--QuoteEBegin--> When the earth is ploughed with a plough
<br>Only then it becomes a country
<br>When the earth is ploughed with a quill
<br>Then it becomes an epic
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<br>There is much feeling in this work; it is far deeper than it first appears. I enjoyed reading it very much.
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Posted by Nocturne on Sun Feb 13, 2005 8:01 pm
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Excellent piece. I've read some of your other work in PQ's main poetry section and I have to say that I love your style. I agree with Ben in saying that your piece is "far deeper than it first appears." Like your other works, it has that feeling of something wonderful laying just beneath the surface. The emotion seems to rise from the words like a gentle, pleasant aroma. You are a very gifted writer. :)
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Posted by Bluesy Socrateaser on Mon Mar 02, 2009 10:29 am
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<blockquote ><div><cite>Quote</cite>If it is not ploughed either with a plough or quill
<br />It is merely just merely earth</div></blockquote>
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<br />Only to man who has raped it with his graduated plow and insulted it with his quill in ways which incite riots.
<br />Bless them both if you will, and for those of you who condone such use of instruments, indeed you will reap what you sow.
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