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Posted by Ben Grader on Fri Sep 02, 2005 11:08 am
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Time does not count;
<br />it stretches out innumerably.
<br />But as we grow older
<br />and the years grow short
<br />time becomes more precious.
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<br />Time does not count
<br />when we can look forward
<br />to a lifetime. When we
<br />are children: and school holidays
<br />last forever, and not just a month;
<br />and the summer is interminable
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<br />It stretches out innumerably;
<br />and the wait for Christmas
<br />or a birthday, seems not
<br />just a few weeks, but years.
<br />Like waiting to be old enough
<br />to ride a bike alone.
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<br />But as we grow older
<br />the days shorten down;
<br />the weeks rush along.
<br />Birthdays flash past
<br />'till suddenly we find
<br />it is time to retire.
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<br />And the years grow short
<br />whilst the time flies by.
<br />So much to be done;
<br />yet such little time left
<br />as our frames grow weaker
<br />and our bodies more frail.
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<br />Time becomes more precious,
<br />as life draws to a close;
<br />and still so much left
<br />that we should have done;
<br />but could not do, as time condensed
<br />until at last the endings come.
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<br />Let us pray at the end
<br />our friends will say;
<br />?They did their best
<br />with what they had.?
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<br />I tried this idea of using the first verse as a sort of precis.
<br />then repeating it as the leading line of each verse, then expanding the thought behind it
<br />Did it work?
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Posted by Phil on Fri Sep 02, 2005 10:30 pm
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<blockquote ><div><cite>Quote</cite>I tried this idea of using the first verse as a sort of precis.
<br />then repeating it as the leading line of each verse, then expanding the thought behind it
<br />Did it work?
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<br />I think it worked out well; it's certainly very clever. Nice poem!
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Posted by Ben Grader on Fri Sep 02, 2005 10:43 pm
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Thanks Phil, I did one some years ago now something like it, but ! do you think I can find it. HA - It was back in the days of gas powered typewriters when I made as many mistakes doing corrections as there was in my original.
<br />Why didn't they invent PCs back when I was young enough to really learn how to get the best from them?
<br />[Now I come to think I did two - I must hunt them down]
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Posted by Bluesy Socrateaser on Mon Mar 02, 2009 9:44 am
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Insightfully, gently, and warmly presented.
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